I've also been doing a lot of critique circle. Enough to reach number 1!!! lol
That's probably why I haven't finished the first draft of BURNING yet. Probably ... .
On top of all that, when I lay down for bed last night, the idea for the new starting point of PAINTING popped into my head. (The old starting point is being moved to the second to last scene in the first chapter, thus keeping everything in chronological order)
Anyway, here is part of my new opening scene. (The part I've written so far lol)
Zack
slammed the door behind him and stomped away from his apartment. I hate her so much.
When
the tears rolled over his lips, they left a salty residue. The pounding sounds
of construction echoed across the street from his apartment. Of the twenty odd
parking spaces around the twelve-story mansion
— a large Japanese apartment building — only three parking spaces had cars in
them.
If I could actually find a girl for more
than a one-night stand, I would definitely never find myself crawling back to Sena
… or accepting her apology. Zack sniffled.
Click.
Thud!
From
behind, a door opened and slammed against the wall.
“Get
your lazy ass back here right this instant!” Sena’s shrill voice ground the
English language like coffee beans.
After
freezing in place, Zack swallowed. “No.” You
can do this, Zack. Just stand up to her. “I’ve had enough of you for one
day.”
Sena
harrumphed. “You’ve had enough of me? Me?”
Smack!
Something
hit him between the shoulder blades.
Zack’s
knees buckled. He glanced down to stare at the high-heeled shoe. “Sena —”
Something
itched at his instincts.
Without
turning, Zack ducked.
A
second high-heeled shoe whizzed
overhead.
Zack
spun to glare at Sena. “Stop throwing things at me!”
“Then
stop leaving the toilet seat up!”
“You
cut holes in my favorite suit for that?”
Sena
spat before marching forward to grab him by the pink tie. “I swear that if you
ever do it again —” Using her free hand, she grabbed him by his blond hair and
jerked his head back.
Zack
yelped. “— I will stab you with a
knife and make you clean up the blood.” Sena stared into his hazel eyes.
While
fighting down the urge to strike a woman, Zack gulped.
With a
snarl causing wrinkles to appear on her forehead, Sena pulled at his hair
again. “Are we clear?”
“Whatever.”
Zack pulled at her fingers.
“That’s
not the correct answer.” Sena tugged on his hair again.
Zack
gritted his teeth. “Fine! I understand! Now let me go before I do something
that we both regret.”
Sena
released his hair. “As long as you —”
“Short-tempered
bitch.” Zack straightened his pin-striped jacket and slapped away another
attempt for his hair. “I’ll come back when you calm the fuck down.”
Sena
growled.
Zack
backpedaled until he made it to the sidewalk. Why is she always like this? Everything was going so well earlier
today.
Let me know what you think.
Comment below!
Thanks for reading,
Travis
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